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Quick opening scene that last for a couple of days then flash forward fifteen years as the rest of the events take place for over a month.
Port City, Valley Trial, Olympus, Cabin, Throne rooms, deserts, underwater, mountain tops, caves, Pantheon Temple, bridges, Gorgon (small desert town), Acropolis (Throne Room), City of Athens, dead forest,
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In Olympus, ZEUS (?) is aging and needs to find a new ruler. He will choose his son POSEIDON (Teenager), or his daughter ATHENA (8). Poseidon and Athena each present their gifts to the city in a competition. Whoever presents the best gifts for the city wins. Poseidon presents hundreds of war horses for battle, however, Athena presents a little sapling as she promises they would grow to large trees and grow wood and sustenances to help the city. To the crowd’s delight she wins easily but Poseidon runs off to the city and discards his family. Athena runs the city and allows mortals to consort with gods. This creates jealousy and turmoil and leads to mortals attacking gods. Zeus in anger attacks back and kills innocents in the city of Athens. Athena distraught to find her city of mortals full of dead innocent people. Athena meets a little mortal toddler who just lost her mother. She wants to take her in, but Zeus says no until he finally obliges. Zeus commands Athena that she will never love a god or raise her sword against one. If she does then Athena must follow the law and do what is necessary...
OVERALL (STRONG RECOMMEND)
Even though Athena is Zeus daughter and Medusa is a mortal they still consider themselves sisters. Mortals and Gods are forbidden to be together but Medusa falls in love with Poseidon. She acts on those feelings when she is tricked by Poseidon because he wants to be King. That forces Athena to curse Medusa and make them enemies. With a strong structure that flows nicely and great conflict that is consistently building “Medusa and Athena” is moving and entertaining. The characters are defined and established while the pacing shines with constant tension....
Based on Greek mythic figures depicting the rise and fall of the loving relationship between Athena and Medusa when an important vow is broken. The premise carries a lot of potential as it provides a rich foundation for character decisions and a steady flow of plot progression. Characters are solid, they are thoroughly developed as audiences will deeply understand and sympathize with Athena and Medusa. This set ups powerful changes as Athena finally turns into the leader for Olympus, and Medusa falls in madness. The only minor downfall is Medusa’s goal constantly changes and she does not have a clear overarching goal like Athena. Dialogue is solid as it helps distinguish characters from one another and it is rarely on the nose. Conflict is a major strength especially in the second half as it constantly escalates and relentlessly challenges the character from an internal perspective, forcing them to change. Even though there are scenes that could be cut in the first half or shorten, structure vastly improves in the second half as scene progress nicely towards a suspenseful climax. Craft is good as scene descriptions are concise and vividly captures the environment as gods and mortals roam ancient Greece. Incorporating a clearer overarching goal for Medusa and shortening some scenes in the first half could improve an already solidly crafted and exciting action adventure....
An heiress to the throne of Olympus must prove to her father that she can lead with impartial judgement, even if it means sentencing her sister to a lifetime of suffering. This is a Greek mythology origin story of Medusa and Athena. The premise has potential but not explored to its fullest potential. The structure could be better in the first half – the pacing is slow and little develops, it’s not until Athena curses Medusa that the narrative takes off. The conflict stagnates a quarter of the way in as Medusa struggles with her need for intimacy, it takes too long for her to act. Character development is okay – her needs and goals are identifiable but not explored enough to really become invested. Dialogue is a bit mixed, sometimes its natural, other times it feels like the characters have nothing to say. The craft is adequate, action and dialogue is concise and balanced but doesn’t grab the attention it’s looking for....