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AgentIzzy Louis (Kerwin Agency) Based on the non-fiction account of Luellen Smileyr:
True Story exposing the tumultuous relationship between Allen "Smiley," a Hollywood Producer turned mobster, and his daughter, Lily.
A middle-aged woman set adrift must come to terms with her volatile childhood as the daughter of gangster Bugsy Siegel's closest associate.
Drama, Biopic, Crime, Mystery, Period, Romance, Character Study, Coming of Age, Cop/FBI/CIA, Dysfunctional Family, Female Protagonist, Film, Gambling, Gangs, Mid-life Crisis, Movie Business, Murder, Organized Crime
Bugsy, The Sopranos, GoodFellas, The Godfather, Boardwalk Empire, L.A. Confidential, Donnie Brasco, Rumor Has It, Casino, The Sicilian Girl, Road to Perdition, Paper Moon
20% 1970s, About Three Years/1980s, About Seven Years/1990, About Five Years
90% Urban (Los Angeles & New York). 10% Suburban (Santa Fe). Various Hollywood Mansions, Apartments, Doheny Towers, Century City Mall, Men's Clothing Store, Restaurants, FBI offices and Hospital.
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LUELLEN SMILEY (LILY) (42) is embarrassed at work when her colleagues hear on TV that her deceased father, ALLEN SMILEY (58, 61, 70s), had set up the murder of his best friend, Ben Siegel. She quits her job and leaves to live with a friend, FLORENCE (70s). There, Lily begins visiting places from her childhood – where she lived with her father, where Ben’s murder took place, and begins talking to people from her childhood. Frustrated with her father’s mysterious life and the toll it has taken on her, she starts seeing a psychologist, ANN (60). As part of Ann’s therapy, Lily is forced to confront her childhood and young adult memories, where she is seen in the ages of 13, 15, 17, 21, and 29. After her mother’s death, Lily lives with her father and is quickly lost in the mysteriousness of her father’s life. Allen rules Lily’s life with intimidation and anger, stripping Lily of her carefree childhood. Her social life is affected when her close friends come to know that her father is a gangster. However, she manages to start a relationship with BILLY (late teens) until her father forbids him from seeing her. In her need...
“My Hoodlum Saint” explores the effects of an authoritarian gangster, Allen Smiley’s, overprotective nature on his daughter, Luellen Smiley (Lily), and how she struggles to understand him, forgive him, regain the ability to accept the love of man, and piece her broken life back together. The premise is filled with engaging moments and great dramatic conflict, although it struggles with a couple of logical issues towards the end. Lily is a very believable and real character and so are all the other characters that surround her. However, as the conflicts are resolved, Lily seems to break out of her character by forgiving her father too abruptly and also by finding the sudden ability to love and get married to Jay Atkins. All the other characters serve purposes that further the plot and character arc. The conflicts are excellently introduced and built up with Lily losing everything and then trying to regain it through therapy sessions where she is forced to confront memories of her past and of her father and also through her ongoing investigations into who her father was and what his involvement with the mafia entailed. However, the conflicts are resolved in a somewhat hard to believe manner. Dialogue distinguishes characters but tends to be unrealistic at moments. The writing ability could be significantly improved. Too many punctuation and grammatical errors are present throughout. The use of semicolons and ellipses is superfluous and could be easily eliminated. The formatting, however, generally complies with industry standards except for some minor issues. This is a stark and realistic portrait of a woman who is deeply troubled by her childhood filled with mystery over her father, a gangster’s, true identity and the reasons why he treated her in such a harsh and cold manner at times. It explores her search for redemption from her past and the ability to forgive her own father and learn to live a normal and happy life....
'My Hoodlum Saint' has a unique premise that unites a relatable and sympathetic character with a compelling concept. Whilst the plot of working through emotional baggage in therapy could be slow, the world of gangster and celebrity, and the high conflict, emotionally turbulent flashbacks maintains interest. Slight flaws in logic and some on the nose dialogue in the resolution are the only things detracting from this well written, dramatic thriller. This is definitely a marketable concept....
The story of what it was really like to grow up as the daughter of a notorious gangster is irresistible, although the frame story surrounding it is uneven. Shifting the focus from the main character’s navel gazing to an actionable quest (i.e. trying to clear her father’s name) will improve things, although the romantic subplot should stay....